All Chapters of 1-STAR TRASH: Bad Review System: Chapter 11
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11. THE FIRST DAY WITHOUT NUMBERS
Dane woke up to the sound of screaming.Not an alarm. Not a drone. Real human screams.He opened his eyes. Still in the Sector 0 underground tunnel. The lights were dead. Only the dim red glow from the shattered pieces of The Core remained.“How long was I out?” he asked. His throat was dry.“14 hours,” Rara answered. She sat next to Mira. Mira was still asleep, breathing softly.Dane tried to stand. Dizzy. His body felt empty. No green panel in front of his eyes. No [EXP]. No.[Level]Empty.“I’m blind,” he whispered.“What do you mean?” Kimo asked.“I can’t see who hates me or who loves me anymore,” Dane said. “I don’t know who I should be careful around.”Rara was silent. Then she took Dane’s hand.“Welcome to being a normal human.”They climbed to the surface just as the sun was rising. Neo-Jakarta looked different.Silent.No floating hologram scores. No Reputation Police drones. No notification sounds saying “Adoration +1”.But there was chaos.On the street in front of Neo-Care
12. Reboot The Core
The red numbers on the hologram kept rising. [BAD REVIEW SYSTEM: REBOOTING… 3%] [BAD REVIEW SYSTEM: REBOOTING… 4%] Dane stepped back two steps. His legs were shaking. Not from fear. Because he’d just tasted life without the system for 24 hours, and he didn’t want to go back. “Shut it down,” Rara said. Her voice was flat, but her hand trembled around the energy pistol. “How?” Kimo asked. “The Core’s already destroyed. This is the backup.” “Then destroy the backup,” Jax replied. He was still limping, but he could stand. Dane looked at the cables still glowing. A quiet voice came from The Core’s fragments: “Host: Dane Mercer… detected… initiating synchronization…” [REBOOTING… 7%] “It’s looking for me,” Dane whispered. “If it links to me, the system comes back online.” “Then run!” Dio shouted. “Get away from here!” Dane didn’t move. Because he remembered. 12 hours ago, he’d hugged Mira without a system warning. Without -100%. Without forgetting. If the system came back, all
13. The New Host
Three weeks after The Core was destroyed, Neo-Jakarta still smelled like smoke.Not explosion smoke. Smoke from thousands of furnaces in Sector 9 where people were burning their old ID cards. The cards that used to display Adoration scores. Now they were just blank plastic.Dane sat at the doorway of the underground station. He held a piece of dry bread. His eyes looked up at the vent that let in sunlight."Hot," he muttered.Mira sat beside him. 12 years old, skinny, but her eyes were older than her age. She handed Dane a water bottle."Drink, Kak."Dane took it. Drank. "Thanks."He didn’t call Mira "little sis." He didn’t remember that word. He just knew: this kid mattered. If she disappeared, his chest would ache.That was enough for Dane."I dreamed again," Mira said suddenly.Dane turned. "Dreamed about what?""Dreamed about us. Back when you still remembered me. We were laughing in the kitchen. You made burnt pancakes."Dane went quiet. He didn’t have a picture in his head. But
14. Liora Rises
Liora didn’t feel anything at first. When she pressed the chip to her chest in the underground room of Sector 1, all she felt was cold. A bone-piercing cold, like ice flooding her veins. “Did it work?” her assistant, Dara, asked. Her voice trembled. Liora nodded. She closed the metal box. Took a breath. Five seconds. Ten seconds. Twenty seconds. Then it came. [SYNCHRONIZATION STARTED] Not a sound. Not text. But a whisper in her head. A voice that sounded like her own, but older, more tired. “New host detected: Liora Vance. Adoration Score: 4.8. Status: Reputation Police.” Liora clutched her chest. Her heart was pounding like crazy. “Turn it off,” she whispered. The system didn’t answer. The whisper continued. “Recalculating parameters… Deleting old protocols… Adjusting to host…” Dara stepped forward. “Captain?” Liora raised a hand. “Don’t touch me.” She walked to the mirror. Looked at her face. The same. No 5.00 appeared on her forehead. Good. That meant this system wa
15. The Case To Sektor 1
Dane knew Mira was gone before anyone said a word.He woke up at 3 AM. Not because of a sound. But because of the emptiness. It felt like a piece of his chest had been ripped out while he slept.“Mir?” he called softly.No answer.He got up. Looked at the corner of the room where Mira slept. The bed was empty. The blanket still neat, like Mira had just folded it and walked away.Dane ran to the door. Kicked it open.“RARA!” he shouted.The whole base woke up in 10 seconds. 390 people grabbed weapons, even though they didn’t know who the enemy was.Rara ran to Mira’s room. Saw the empty bed. Her face went pale instantly.“She was taken,” she whispered.“By who?” Jax asked while strapping a knife to his belt.“Who else,” Dane answered. His voice was flat. Too flat. “Liora.”Kimo walked in, holding a torn piece of cloth.“Found it by the back window,” he said. “Smells like Reputation Police disinfectant.”Dane took the cloth. Sniffed it. Yeah. The distinct smell of the cleaning fluid Lio
16. SPEECH IN THE TOWN SQUARE
Dane counted time with his own heartbeat.Since Liora shut the cell door, seven hours had passed. Seven hours with no sound except water dripping from a leaky pipe in the ceiling. Seven hours staring at cold concrete walls. Seven hours designing one thing: how to make an entire city hate Liora in twenty, four hours.The energy cuffs on his wrists were still glowing red. Every time he tried to move them, a small electric current ran up his arm, stiffening his muscles. Liora’s new system was more advanced than the old Reputation Police. These cuffs didn’t just bind, they also read pulse, body temperature, and adrenaline levels. If Dane tried to escape, the cuffs would explode.“Clever,” Dane muttered.He leaned against the wall. His eyes were closed, but his mind was working fast. Liora said she’d announce him tomorrow in the Sector 1 Town Square. He’d stand beside her, cuffed, as proof that even Dane Mercer, the destroyer of the old system, now believed in the new one. A perfect image
17. MIDNIGHT ATTACK
Two days after the speech at Sector 1 Square, the air in Neo-Jakarta felt heavier. Not because of the weather. But because everyone was holding their breath, waiting for something to explode.Liora no longer appeared in public. After being humiliated by Dane and the crowd, she vanished into the Sector 1 fortress. The steel doors were sealed. Communications cut off. Only the hum of generators echoed through the night, a sign her systems were still alive.“She’s preparing something,” Rara said as they gathered in the Sector 9 underground room.“What?” Jax asked.“Troops,” Rara answered. “Liora can’t rely on the citizens anymore. So she’ll use the full force of the Reputation Police.”Dane stayed silent. His hands still ached from the shock of Liora’s shackles. His lips hadn’t fully healed. But his eyes were clear.“How many troops does she have left?” he asked.“About two hundred,” Kimo replied. “Most are still loyal to her. The rest are just scared.”“Two hundred armed soldiers against
18. A CITY WITHOUT NUMBERS
Three weeks after the last chip was thrown into the Dead Sea, Neo-Jakarta was still a mess. But this was a different kind of mess. Not the kind caused by a collapsing system. But the kind caused by people learning to walk without a crutch.Dane stood on the roof of the old Sector 9 station. The evening wind hit his face. Below, he saw the new market set up by the Free Faction. No hologram prices. No seller scores. Just bargaining with voices and eye contact.“Looks weird,” he muttered.“Why’s it weird?” Rara asked, sitting beside him.“Because I can’t tell right away who I can trust,” Dane answered. “Before, I just had to look at the number above someone’s head. Now I have to hear their voice, see their eyes.”Rara smiled. “That’s called being human.”Dane didn’t reply. He stared toward Sector 1. The Reputation Police fortress still stood. But its flag had changed. No more number logo. Just plain white cloth._Liora in the Cell_On the lowest floor of the fortress, Liora sat on a thin
19. The Road to The Center City
The first day of the journey felt longer than the three weeks of chaos in Neo-Jakarta. The six of them walked along the old highway, cracked and overgrown with weeds. The sun beat down overhead, but not one of them complained. They were too tired to complain.“We’ve been walking for six hours,” Kimo said, wiping his sweat. “How much farther to the Center City?”“No one knows for sure,” Rara replied. “The old map says it’s three hundred kilometers. But this road hasn’t been maintained in decades.”“Three hundred kilometers on foot?” Dio muttered. “We could die halfway.”“We already died once when the system was still alive,” Dane said without looking back. “Now we’re just walking.”Mira walked beside him. Her face was red from the heat, but her steps stayed steady. Dane glanced at her now and then, making sure the girl wasn’t falling behind.“Thirsty?” Mira asked.Dane nodded. They stopped under the shade of a dead tree. Jax pulled the last water bottle from his backpack.“One sip each
20. THE HEART OF THE CENTRAL CITY
The steel door behind them closed without a sound. Dane looked back. No way out. Only a long corridor lit by cold white lights.“This place is too clean,” Rara whispered. “No dust. No footprints.”“Because there’s no one here,” Jax replied. “At least, no one who walks.”They moved forward. Their footsteps echoed against the metal walls. Mira clutched Dane’s hand tightly. Her breathing was quick.“Kak, this place… it makes me suffocate,” Mira whispered.“Me too,” Dane answered. “But we’ve come this far.”After a hundred meters, the corridor ended in a round room. In the center stood a glass pillar three meters tall. Inside it, a soft blue light pulsed.“What is that?” Kimo asked.Dane stepped closer. At the base of the pillar, tiny words were engraved:_“ADORATION CORE – VERSION 1.0 – YEAR 2034.”_“This is the heart,” Dane said. “The first machine that calculated human scores.”Suddenly, the floor trembled. From the walls, a female hologram appeared. Her face was flawless, her smile to